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There are murmurs in the crevices of my mind
where I have deposited my invisible companions,
restlessness growing and the threat of mutiny.

Silvery tentacles of yearning fill the air,
I am cradled in the branches of the world tree
that dares not release me into the wind.

Beneath the flooded earth with broken tulips
there are voices echoing in the exhausted stone depths,
chanters that can no longer speak as humans.

I am rising with the smoke of destroyed villages,
folding my raven wings against my form,
myself shouting for an answer in the vacant land.

We never receive an answer in our language
of  the trees and the birds and the earth,
and instead we are shaped like clay vessels
and silenced with a hemlock cloth.
©2009 ~VFireFalcon
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There needs to be a category for surreal poetry, because that's what most of what I do is, and I hate putting it in General. There is meaning behind it, but I don't want to put it in a category that would then define how people view it.

I'm interested in hearing what this poem makes people think of, and critique, even really harsh critique, is appreciated.

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I just read a Vietnam era book, DISPATCHES, by Michael Herr - I recommend it to you - and not illogically your poem "Voices," speaking of "destroyed villages"and "chanters who can no longer speak as humans" echoed of destroyed Vietnamese villages and the million Vietnamese dead in that war. Your poem can echo myriad other things for other readers, and can mean whatever you yourself intended it to mean, but that was what it spoke of to me.

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